Besides rearranging my prologue I have written a stunning opening scene to the book. Consequently it is a battle scene which I a quite proud of and I am sure will be thrown out in a couple of months when I restart the book yet again. But I think I will stick with my titles no matter how many times I scratch a rewrite. I can not begin to to tell you how many times characters actions have changed, or their names have changed, or their lineages have changed. I am done with change. Well heres the battle.
The wind that blew around Fyrie was cold, like the air of a frozen mountain. The cold was unusual in the forests near Savgly, yet it felt strangely familiar to all those who hid in the forest. The tree which Fyrie crouched in had ice frozen to its leaves. Though it was almost summer the cold still stung in the evenings.
Fyrie pulled an arrow from her quiver, for it wouldn’t be long now. She head the horses hoofs against the rocky ground and still she stayed steady; waiting patiently to strike. Fifty Sarths filled the trees waiting for her first move, she knew all rested on her timing yet she did not fear. Steady was the blowing of the wind as loose locks of her hair blew in her face. Closer was the sound, the striking, the beat of the hoofs. It would not be long, they would be in sight. She knew they would not fail.
Suddenly she realized it was time she lifted her bow and shot. As she did the arrow lit with fire from inside her and it hit its target. The first officer was down. After that many more arrows flew, fire less and disguised in the night. They all hit their targets, human officers and goblins fell to the ground. Then the battle broke, birds streamed for the trees and took War-Yie form; shooting arrows, throwing spears, and dropping rocks.
-Quick note before I say goodbye; War-Yies are creatures which can take two forms, the first form is that of a bird and the second is a human-like creature with wings. They have keen hearing and amazing strength, plus their ability to turn into birds makes them very camouflaged. Sarths on the other hand are humanish creatures with blue skin, nature like clothes, and grass-like hair.
Well thats the battle, or the beginning of it anyway. I must continue to write it and next time I have something of value to share I will not hesitate in doing so.
-Katherine
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